KNIFE CRIME: My Final Piece
People are dying, gangs are recruiting.
But who’s to blame for the tragedies occuring?
Youths are getting framed, taking all the blame,
It’s our fault that the world doesn’t notice all the shame.
Born into poverty, born into nothingness.
And it’s even worse that the media aren’t telling us.
Shools, poverty, I can make a list of reasons.
But as we sit here watching, people are turning into demons.
Don’t be mean, don’t be cruel.
Don‘t turn your life into being a fool.
We need to stop this now, before our time is up.
If we don’t stop this quickly, Britain will turn corrupt.
We can stop them, help them not feel unsure.
Then they won’t change their life and not take the detour.
With the right guidance, they will not be silenced.
Finally giving them a voice in the world,
will help us gain the peace that we deserve.
Comments (5)
12 Feb 2019
What a fantastic poem!
We loved your use of rhyming couplets the really bring out the imagery in the reader's mind.
Can you add a final rhyming couplet that expresses what you think the solution is?
Maybe if we teach them about gangs, they will change their horrid plans.
I really like that!!! Maybe you can add that to your poem...
However I didn't chose that for my solution, maybe I can write another one from someone else's perspective (like Olivia suggested) using this idea!!!
13 Feb 2019
I really loved your poem. It covered everything I though was especially important.
I thought the line, "finally giving them a voice in the world " particularly interesting. Something I felt during BNC live, was that we had the chance to make a decision, that would change... SOMETHING!! I was a bit disappointed it was fictional, but it felt nice to make an "important" decision.
I think that may have been one of the most important lines in your poem, for sometimes I think responsibility IS good!! I think that young people would feel like they were involved BECAUSE of their opportunity to let them speak!!! Well done, steadfast_moon!!!
Thank you impartial_panda_bear!!
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